Assignment Write-Up for "Block"

After my original movie was basically torn apart during critique, I looked at my piece and was like, "Alright, how can I make this movie EASY TO WATCH," because I completely agreed with a large amount of the criticism that said that it was soooooo slow. So what did I do?

I cut out FIVE MINUTES OF FOOTAGE.

And honestly, that was definitely the best decision I've made with the piece. It doesn't lose anything; in fact, I think that it pushes the message even more, and illustrates the progression of her thought process even more.

Here are the various problems the first had and how I dealt with them:

1: My God, it's slow.
A: I cut out five minutes of unecessary footage, and as the main character begins to become more excited, I spliced in newly recorded audio that illustrates her excitement. I then took the audio and pushed them really close to each other, in order to make her thoughts more exciteing, culminating to her thoughts overlapping when she's typing.

2: Um, his clothes? Those ain't church clothes.
A: Well, if I don't say they are church clothes, you won't wonder why they aren't so I cut the audio clip. In fact I caught all audio before she begins to think about this guys story.

3: Are the audio and shots in the begining necessary?
A: In short, no. So BOOM they were cut. It was one of those things where you need to figure out what is necessary to push the story to push forward. So I cut out 5 minutes of footage.

4: The last scene is too long. Fix it. I don't want to fall asleep.
A: The ending is supposed to be the culmination of my message. So if my audience are getting bored with my movie, I failed as a film maker. So- the way I fixed the end is by making a sudden jump cut to her at the computer, a second, then overlapped the audio to make her thoughts seem to be overflowing, one more second end. I think it's a great solution.